Wonderful story! I loved the doubt that you put into 402's mind.. and his follow through until the very end. I would LIKE to have thought that he stood a chance with her but with most women.. eh.. too superficial. Anyways, you should changed "grinded" with "ground", to show the correct tense.. Amusingly enough, THAT is the only thing that I felt needed changing. ^.^ Also, I love how you delved into the three character's minds a bit.. even the snake's. I hope hope HOPE that you will write more.. This seems to be a vastly under-appreciated piece. :3 Would it be okay if I made a few groups aware of this piece? It deserves more love..